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Something to Feed the Birds by *Crewed:iconCrewed:



It was dawn, and the sun was breathing
clouds of pink, orange, and white.
And some invisible man, from so very high up
was stitching new colours into the sky,
closing them tight, by spindle and thread
so all the Martians and systems and constellations
would never be seen again.
At least for a little while.
Knees crossed, coat buttoned, coffee mug steaming
I read the paper out loud, so all of the mountains
and trees
and you
could hear the news,
November seventeenth, 1968.

And I told you all about the car crash
by Sycamore Bridge.
You asked about the grand oak tree, and the pond
and the quiet, wrinkled lady who used to feed the ducks.
We talked about them for a while.
And you brought out your photographs of the park,
so vivid and green, with trout rising all around
the rainbow gasoline circles and bits of bread.
It was raining so hard that afternoon, but we walked anyway
with matching raincoats, and boots,
and smiles.
I took a picture of you and the duck lady,
who gave you a bit of rye to feed the birds.
Sometime, I’m going to read you an article
that ends with
“It was all just a dream. They’re okay,
really.”

And sometime, we’ll move from this old, rickety home
right into the city. We’ll get our own stove,
and we’ll never get stuck in the rain again
with a whole lot of bread and no feathers in sight.
But the view out here
is so empty, and silent,
and beautiful.
©2008 *Crewed
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:)
Inspired by a very similar situation by the pond near my old house in England.
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~GetYourGrip:iconGetYourGrip: May 17, 2008, 8:47:39 PM
correct me if I can't recall this quite correctly, but didn't you say something like your writing lacks sentimental value? but then you call me good...
if this doesn't have sentimental value, then my writing must seem like it's made mindlessly and heartlessly.
really good writing, Alice.

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Watch the green summer trees blur by in the rear view
The windows rolled down, I saw you singing, couldn't hear you
I have that scene memorized so clearly, but the years flew
I'm jumping like I'm grabbing for the stars, like the deers do
~GetYourGrip:iconGetYourGrip: May 17, 2008, 8:48:15 PM
i just realized i said correct twice within the same sentence...and it seems silly.

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Watch the green summer trees blur by in the rear view
The windows rolled down, I saw you singing, couldn't hear you
I have that scene memorized so clearly, but the years flew
I'm jumping like I'm grabbing for the stars, like the deers do
~Midnight-showers:iconMidnight-showers: May 17, 2008, 10:29:09 PM
I like this a lot, particularly the connectedness and disconnectedness of the different ideas and phrases. I don't know if that made sense. It's late, that's my only excuse.
"with a whole lot of bread and no feathers in sight" I'm pretty sure that's my favorite line. Everything about it, the flow, the words, the rhythm--it's great. :D

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"...but 400 years later, an idea can still change the world."
-V for Vendetta
=Kip-Lee:iconKip-Lee: May 18, 2008, 5:19:52 AM
Really lovely prose/poetry. C:
~Martywolf92:iconMartywolf92: May 19, 2008, 12:29:53 AM
Awesome poetry. =D I like it. Sounds really good.

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*Crewed:iconCrewed: May 23, 2008, 8:29:33 AM
Thank you :)

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The world used to be a bigger place.
The world's still the same - there's just less in it.
~Martywolf92:iconMartywolf92: May 24, 2008, 12:07:23 AM
my pleasure

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Have a good sniff around my sisters and cousins page and artworks they are really good.
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